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Liz Zimmers's avatar

What a wonderful, rich tale!

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Ian Dunmore's avatar

Thanks you so much, Liz!

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Bart Bounds's avatar

Well done. Nice use of shifting narrative distance. Intriguing

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Ian Dunmore's avatar

Thanks Bart, I appreciate it!

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Eric Falden's avatar

Fantastic atmosphere in this one. Love the imagery, love the clash of cultures. I think this is one of your best, Ian.

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Ian Dunmore's avatar

Thanks, Eric! It definitely felt like there were some resonances when writing this.

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Keith Long's avatar

Excellent all around.

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Ian Dunmore's avatar

Thanks so much, Keith!

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J. Claypool's avatar

So good. I enjoyed this.

I think the greatest accomplishment here is the dynamic change within the main character. It’s 100% believable. I love him for it.

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Ian Dunmore's avatar

Thank you, J! It’s a bit of an obsession of mine to make every story feel full regardless of length, so I’m glad I was able to stick the landing with Langei!

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J. Claypool's avatar

Do you plan that as a writer? Before you start?

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Ian Dunmore's avatar

To an extent. I'll usually pick a few points of contact with the story I love and then work out the inbetweens as I write. My favorite plotting tool by far is The Harmon Circle for that reason.

For this story in particular, I didn't know how it was gonna end. I wrote to just past the incident in the blizzard, then I took a pause. I storyboarded a ton of options -- the vilkolak kills Langei, Langei kills the vilkolak but dies of his wounds, he turns himself in and simply faces execution -- but I felt this version gave a redemption that was satisfying and thematically consistent.

So yeah... points of contact. Neil Gaiman calls them islands in the mist, like your story is you looking down at a misty valley with islands rearing up here and there. You can see the islands, but not the path. So I try and pin down my islands, but discovery write the path.

What about you? What works for you?

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J. Claypool's avatar

I do something similar.

I start with an outline with major plot points then add minor points in between those—drilling down into whichever event inspires me at the time.

I think it was smart to storyboard out possible endings. That’s a strategy I plan to borrow.

And you mentioned the Harmon Circle. I have never heard of that before… and it makes so much sense! I love it!

Thanks for the well thought-out note. I learned something !

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