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Keith Long's avatar

Wow, such character development in so short a time (it felt short because I loved it). You are a master at this trick.

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Ian Dunmore's avatar

Thank you so much Keith! I was actually worried that characterization was lacking in this one, so I’m very happy to hear this!

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Daniel Bishop's avatar

Great story. I loved the anthropomorphic descriptions of the tunnel dark, and that I absolutely did not see Franico's arc ending the way it did.

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Ian Dunmore's avatar

Thanks D.A.! I always try to envision my settings as characters unto themselves. I had a lot of fun with the tunnel and the darkness, and got more abstract than I usually do. Very glad to hear I pulled it off!

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Justin Toney's avatar

My god, man! What a journey! Kudos

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Ian Dunmore's avatar

Thanks Justin! I’m glad you liked it!

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Zachary Harned's avatar

Man, Ian. You got hell'a good story tellings.

WWI?

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Ian Dunmore's avatar

Thanks! I feel a little like a magician giving away the trick here, but the combination I was going for was Siege of Malta but set in the Atlas Mountains. I actually had a whole section where Tenuto nerded out about the different kinds of rocks, but I took it out for length.

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Zachary Harned's avatar

Lol, don't reveal if you don't want to! I like guessing, and thinking about it. You got a real strong style, my friend. I love the adaption of history to fantasy.

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